Peer Review: one

I love the way in which Brittney has pulled a part and analysed little by little the text, That Deadman Dance, to really express the theme of connection or lack there of. She explains how everything has a soul and a meaning, yet one is earning for connection with their land. i love the way in which she has challenged reader to ask the question as to why there is a lack of connection when it should come so naturally, without actually asking the question. the way in which she composes a piece of her heart into describing how she understands the theme of disconnection through leave places is appreciate, however, more insight to this would allow a deeper connection with her readers but overall her insight is inspiring, eye-opening and enjoyable to read.


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  1. A nice tone to your first entry Anabelle, but it does need much better final editing! Always start sentences with a capital letter and check your grammar and spelling!
    Come for help if you need it.
    Editing Needed (and some workshop follow-ups- see Purdue Owl for help:
    * there of = thereof [ one word ]
    * yet one is earning= yet one is yearning
    *i love the way= I love the way [caps at start of sentence]
    *disconnection through leave places = This doesn’t make sense. Read it aloud and see if you can fix it.


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