Your blog this week was moving to read. As someone who has lost a pet themselves, I can understand the indescribable feeling associated with the event. You articulated my feelings, and im sure your own, perfectly in questioning how something you have been reliant on for so long is suddenly gone. The comparison between your fifth birthday present, to your boyfriend helping in the search for him shows how much of your life you had this puppy. That isn’t an easy experience to journey through. Thank you for sharing.
I particularly enjoyed the structure to your writing. It started off with me reading every word quickly, feeling the same excitement as your five-year-old self, anticipating the present. Then taking part in your excitement to discover it was a puppy – more than anything you thought of that day in school. And obviously, the sadness that followed with reading the ending. That wasn’t how I anticipated your story to turn out. Your added photo also contributed to your emotive language.
If I could give you one piece of advice, it would be to consider this sentence, “How could something that has been with me for the nearly my whole life, suddenly be gone?” The word “the” is better left out.
Overall, my favourite blog post this semester!
You showed in-depth knowledge in your blog post this week. I admire the use of critical analysis on a blog that is allowed to be relaxed. This shows your knowledge of the text and the differences that each author brings with their writing. I particularly liked that although you wrote about their difference in writing, you remained constant with the theme. You addressed their view on society, that is, Dicken’s perspective on all of society, Austen’s perspective majoring in the upper class and Elliot, who focuses on humanity. You contrasted these three authors in a clear manner; “Elliot serves as middle ground between the works of Dickens and Austen”.
Well done on constructing a clear analysis of the authors and their perspectives.
This is the first time I have peer reviewed your page and I must say, I was not disappointed with what you put in front of me to read. I particularly liked the structure of this letter and how you first acknowledged him as a person, and then his actions. You appreciated the way he carried himself first and then the way he encouraged Eppie to make her own choice. You beautifully put to words how the best way to take care and nurture the one’s you love first begins with taking care of yourself.
I think when you write a letter to someone, it is always smart to honour the person you are writing to. You did this perfectly with the words, “you let her make her own choice even though you wanted her to choose you”. The acknowledgement of his self-desire of Eppie choosing him was clearly overruled by his desire of Eppie’s best interest. You then took this a step further by highlighting the wrongdoing of Godfrey to promote the goodness of Silas’ action.
If I could give you only one piece of advice for your next letter, it would be to end it with, “Yours Sincerely” and then your name. The words in a letter hold so much more credibility when the reader can match it with a face.
Overall, you clearly have a thorough understanding of the text. Well done!
I really enjoyed your blog this week. Firstly, your choice of writing in letter format was easily communicated! So much so that I did not even have to read your posted question above to understand the structure of your blog. Well done in that setting.
You communicate a clear image of the working life compared to the new, “revolutionised” life showing your understanding of the text in class. Your approach to this week’s blog topic was a delight to read. I particularly admire the opening and closing of your letter with “my dear friends”, not only is this a personal touch, but it also allows the reader to allude back to the start of the letter once they read the end which takes their mind from where you have gone compared to where they still are. This was quite impacting to read and a well though-out post. Amazing job! You should be proud.
Great blog post this week! I thoroughly enjoyed your repetition of the phrase; “all like one another” It created ease in the way it communicated from your mind to the reader’s. Your description of your city was very different to mine: mine being chaotic and yours being calm and collected. Your visual of the mailman, the children, the birds and even the mailboxes was refreshing to picture as my city has a different variety of people and houses. I enjoyed glancing through your perspective of your hometown.
Your final comment about your sisters and you all being like one another as you plumped on the couch was quite comical. Well done!
Victoria, well done on this phenomenal blog! I love the fact that you wrote this with the language we studied in tutorials. I can see from that alone that you have put a lot of effort and time into this creative piece of writing. I definitely wouldn’t have thought of this idea so I thoroughly enjoyed reading what you had to say. You are an encouragement to people to think outside of the box and to truly be creative. You have shown an accurate understanding of Sleary’s character and successfully depicted a clear image of work, family and home. I am glad I chose to look at your blog site this week.
Well done! See you in class.
I thoroughly enjoyed the way you opened up your blog to the reader with a personal touch. Words such as, “I groaned in despair” and “it was with great duress that I sat down and started to read Emma” engaged me quickly as I had similar feelings toward reading this novel. Because of the way you grasped my attention so early, you were able to sustain the attention throughout the entirety of your blog. This is not the first blog of yours that I have read and it certainly wont be the last – but it is definitely safe to say that you hold me in the palm of your hands with such captivation in the thoughts you put to words.
I also admire how you continued this thought of not enjoying the novel by critiquing Austen’s lengthy sentences. This made the turn over all the more interesting when you came to understand the reason behind why we were reading this book. In my opinion, you have successfully grasped the concept of Austen’s novel, not just because of the way you expressed your thoughts on her ego – but because you had an initial opinion on what the book would be like and still allowed Austen to transform your entire perception toward the book. That shows a thorough understanding as well as effective writing on both yours, and Austen’s part.
Another part I will pinpoint are the photos you chose. It was a refreshing touch to not see a photo of Jane Austen or the character of Emma herself, but to see a photo depicting a key issue within the novel.
Looking forward to hearing more of your insights!
See you in class 🙂